Thursday, 16 December 2021

Cut Short

It didn't work out. Sadly, I didn't make it through to the second round of the competition, but I'm happy with my story. I'm should receive feedback from the judges soon. Looking forward to seeing what they thought.
In the mean time, here's the story. Let me know what you think.

Their Man

His face was unforgettable. It had been behind the gun that killed her sister. Seeing him, Number 5 in a lineup for her stolen purse from the day before, brought back all the fear and confusion Dana felt five years ago.
How reassuring the police had been back then. With CCTV from the convenience store and my eyewitness description, they were sure to find their man.
Well, here was “their man”. Could she point him out, keep all the other details of the bag snatch the same? They would take DNA samples, right? Then match him to Shanice’s murder? She’d heard stories about DNA evidence going to waste. Could she falsely accuse him and hope?
But there was number 2. That was the man who robbed her, for sure. The comb-over and huge overbite were giveaways. If another witness were to pick him, both men might get away. Dana was raised to do the right thing, and she’d been growing past fear.
“Number 2,” she said, pointing at comb-over.
“You’re sure, Miss Carey?”
“Yes. I’m sure.”


“Hey. About number 5...”
“Officer Denton?” He looked like he’d been caught stealing. “Sorry, I shouldn’t have told you that. He’s one of ours. We sometimes ask the guys to step in. Did you see him earlier?”
That figured. He was “their man”, through and through, and never caught.
Dana decided to buy the gun she’d resisted these last five years. What might she, raised to do the right thing, use it for?

Tuesday, 14 December 2021

So Few Words, So Little Time

I entered a competition. It's another flash fiction competition. I'm starting to get a feel for the style and I like the shorter than short stories I've been creating. 250 words is VERY LITTLE. Having to conceive, write, edit and submit 250 words in a genre chosen by someone else, that must contain a particular event/action and a specific word (often the easiest part of the challenge) is even harder.
Doing all of that in 24 hours is ...
... SO MUCH FUN!

I know 250 words doesn't sound like a lot. It isn't. Writing 250 words is also not hard. Writing 250 words in a story is another matter. Formulate the idea based around a character who we have to care for in 40 words or less. Describe the scenarios (terrible, of course) in 80 words. Then there are 80-90 words to challenge the character and resolve before giving a denouement (positive or negative) in 20 words.
The most important things are, this must be internally honest and subjectively satisfying to as many as possible. How?

I've set myself a couple of rules:
1. No matter the scenario, it must be believeable! The reader must be able to imagine themselves facing this challenge.
2. It must not be irredeemably bleak. There must be some hope to cling on to. A reader can empathise more easily with a character who faces a surmountable challenge. Why? Because nobody likes no-win situations.
3. The ending must feel like it is leading to something else. The end of the story isn't the end of the story. The character must be moving forward with something (horror is the exception to this, where the protagonist may well be eviscerated by a horrid beast).

So, out of the 5486 entries for the competition, only 1150 will go through to the second round. I'll be happy if I get that far.

Wish me luck?

Tuesday, 20 July 2021

The Empty Court

 I needed a new legend of a war between night and day for an RPG scenario I'm trying to write, and this is what sprang to mind today. I hope you like it.

The Empty Court

Oíche sat upon his throne of night, turning his invisible face to look over the young world below him. They could not see him, he knew, and their world was darkness for half the day. It had been this way for many days.

As he watched, Oíche realised that many of the animals ran in fear when the light of day faded and the darkness of night took hold. As he wondered what might be the cause, he saw Chonaic, the spotted hyena, rising from her den to hunt.

“Chonaic,” he called, “I need to ask a favour.”

“Anything for you, King of Night,” Chonaic said, her mouth in a broad smile.

“I’ve noticed many of the animals run and hide as night comes around. I wanted to know if you could look at the sun as it rises and see what changes to make it so.”

Chonaic was a wiley beast and saw in this an opportunity. She showed nothing in her eyes, but smiled all the wider and promised, “Yes, my King. I will find out what frightens the animals so.”

Chonaic spent days dreaming of easy carrion to feed on, and so she called on Sionnach and Broc to aid in her quest. They schemed and planned and after a few days, Chonaic came back to Oíche with her head hung low.

“What is it, Chonaic? You seem sad.”

Shaking her head, Chonaic began, “Oh, mighty Oíche, King of Night and Darkness, it is sad what I have to tell you. An Grían says horrible things about you. She tells the animals in Soilse that you are a dangerous King and that we, the animals of Dorcha, are savages that would slaughter them all given the chance.”

Oíche was shook. “How could she say such a thing? She has never even met me.”

“Don’t just take my word for it. Broc, Sionnach, tell him what you heard.”

Broc came forward in obeisance. “She calls you ‘Blood Drinker’ and says that we bring the blood of the slain to your altars at night to feed your hunger.”

Oíche wailed in anger.

Sionnach, snuck out from behind the others, confident in their plan. “Do not let her hear you wail. She tells the animals of Soilse that you turn into a beast that hunts without mercy, howling in the darkness.”

“ENOUGH!” cried Oíche, “I will put her lies to rest. Gather the dawn walkers and the dusk stalkers to meet on the edge of night. I will not bear this insult. We will make her regret every word!”

The three looked at each other, dreaming of easy Carrion, and ran off to call forth the armies of dawn and dusk. Meanwhile, Oíche called out the night creatures and told them where to find the day walkers as they slept. He commanded them to go into the dens and sets of the sun worshippers and cut them and hurt them. Broc taught them how to smell out a set.

The war was bloody and lasted for days. Through it all, the maddening cackle of Chonaic was heard throughout the field of war. Not even rest could be found as Broc had taught the Dorchadas to dig out the sleepers, and through it all, Sionnach ran the length and breadth of the battlefield, hunting, feasting and running again, always one step away from the teeth and claws of the Soilse.

An Grían was unprepared, but she knew something Oíche did not. The other gods had been working hard to introduce other creatures to the world. They were called “people”. They were as varied in form as the animals, with tall and short stature, long and stubby ears, broad and long and flat noses, some with horns, and others with tails. Some even borrowed the forms of animals.

The gods did not want to bring their people into a world at war and so they intervened. They stopped the bloodshed and commanded the Queen of Day and King of Night to come to the table to end it forever.

As Oíche laid out the accusations that had been made, An Grían was astounded. She claimed to have never said such things. The Gods, seeing the perpetrators attempting to hide, called forth Chonaic, Broc and Sionnach.

“Chonaic, you have lied to the King of Night and encouraged him to spill the blood of innocents, while you wallowed in carrion, your cackle heard throughout the field of war. We promise, we will put the fear of your laughter in the hearts of all the people and they will ever be wary of you, driving you out and destroying your people.”

“That is unfair. Can I not have one people to eat?”

“Very well,” said the Gods, for they understood the hunt, “we will mark one tribe of people that you will always find them, but they will not die without fighting.”

Cowed, Chonaic backed away.

“Broc, you have taught the Dorchadas to dig out the sets of the innocent and kill them while they sleep. The same will happen to you. The People will know your places of rest and will drive you and your descendants out.”

“Will you give me no way to defend myself?”

“What we give you is a blessing and a curse. It will make them hate you more but will make them fear you more. You will carry a blight that will make them and their livestock ill. They will avoid you for it, but not for long. As the blight spreads, they will dig up your sets and push you away from their lands.”

Sionnach hid, as always.

“Come out Sionnach. You can’t run forever. The people will eat up your hunting lands, making them small. You will be forced to live next to them, eating their filth and hiding from their noise. They will not hunt you, but they will not love you. You will live on the fringes, taking scraps only. Even your own descendants will curse your name.”

Oíche nodded. “I think these punishments are fair.”

The Gods turned to him. “You have yet to be punished.”

“You would punish me for my mistakes?”

“No, Night King, we would punish you for your rage. You let it out so quickly, killing many and creating a frightening world. Those things you feared will be real. The people will be frightened of you, but only for a while. Your dominion over the new world will be lessened. Not half a day shall you have, but only one hour in three. In that time, many people will hide from you, reminding you of your foolishness.”

Oíche had to swallow his rage. He could not let it out now, or he would prove them correct. “Let me at least be stronger some days. Let me have this pride.”

The Gods went into counsel and thought on how they could leave Oíche with some of his pride. When eventually they returned, they had a solution.

“Behold,” they said, “we have turned the world on it’s axis. It will drift from day to night as always, but for a part of the year, night will hold greater sway than day.”

Oíche looked pleased, as he felt as though he had gained more than he had lost.

“However,” the Gods continued, “your own people will not tolerate your dominion. When the light of day is weak the world will be cold, and life will run from it. Even your own subjects will hide, sleeping for days to avoid the cold and the hunger. You will gaze down on the barren world, King of the Empty Court.”

Oíche’s rage exploded. “Then I will curse your people. I will blight them with my rage and they will rise up and slaughter their own. I will curse them with the blood lust that was expected of me and they will drink deep from their own. I will make them hate the light and they will hide from it. You will all remember the day you hurt me.”

Oíche left the gods, returning to the Invisible throne.

An Grían raised her voice at last. “His temper is frightening. I don’t know how I can protect a world such as this.”

The Gods smiled. “Fear not. We expected his rage. Take this,” they said, and handed her a silver flute. “When Oíche is at his strongest, you can play this flute and begin to destroy his sway. The power of life will spring forth and your light will fill the world again and though he may try to hide his intentions, you will see him over the edge of the world. He will try to hide, no doubt, but his domain is smaller now and he will not hide for long. You will see him more often than he will hide.”

And so it continued. The light of An Grían showed the schemes of Oíche and even when The Empty Court held sway, the Song of Light would pierce the deepest cold and bring forth the spring of life.


Sunday, 28 March 2021

Editorial Advice

I have no idea how to edit. I know this, because every time I have to do it, I end up staring at a page of words and not knowing what to do with them. I've read a few books of being a writer and most of them have a chapter on editing, but I think you're supposed to have picked up the skills that will make this easy in the preceding chapters.

Somewhere in my brain there is a disjoint that doesn't connect one with the other.

A quote attributed to Antoine de Saint-Exupery, the early 20th century aviator:

Perfection is achieved, not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing left to take away.
I'm taking this as my mantra. I've often had trouble keeping to word limits for competitions, particularly in magazines, and I end up stopping halfway through to cut out what I think I don't need. Of course, by the time I realise I did need it, it's too late, and I have to remember what I destroyed.

When I write now, I don't edit (apart from the occasional grammar or spelling error that chagrins me). These drafts are usually much longer than I want them to be. 3000 word limit? I write what I feel like before I start stripping down. If I end up with 5000 words, I have to almost punish myself to strip out 2000 words. (Thankfully, it is rare that things go that far.)

This is great practice! Getting a story down to the core is the best feeling. Pulling out extra words, worthless turns of phrase, clichés!

I never had a problem with clichés before. I thought of them as being like tropes. Tropes are useful for saving exposition. I don't need to explain a whole pile of techno-jargon for hackers if I can quickly talk about bots, firewalls and spiders. I know these will mean something to most readers, and I can decide whether they are standard pieces of code running somewhere else or virtual creatures and actual walls of fire in a full 3D virtual world later.

But clichés lost their purpose quickly. While I might be able to use a cliché in a novel and get away with it, in a short story a cliché is stopping me from telling my story. This has stolen a blade from my armoury, but has forced me to sharpen other weapons.

A word to the wise (probably not advice most writers need); if you need to work to a tight deadline, make sure you don't waste any time in the editing. It will probably take longer than you imagine. Time is as important as word counts or word choice.

So strip it right down. Become a butcher. Every cut is not a random slice, but is creating a cut of meat that someone will find succulent.

Resources

Writer Craig Hallam has begun a YouTube channel with some advice on writing and the industry.

MasterClass teaches writing skills from people who do this for a living!

Daily Writing Tips has some editing exercises with sample solutions.

If you know of any other resources that could be added to this list, please put them in the comments.

Sunday, 21 March 2021

Recognised

 So, I mentioned in my last post that I'd been entering competitions. One of those was in a magazine. It was a flash fiction comp where the first and last paragraphs were the same but the meaning had been changed by the story.

Sadly, I didn't win, BUT...

... I did get into the highly commended section. Seeing your name in print for something positive is a BUZZ, for sure. I will continue entering competitions and honing my craft. JOIN ME! 

Tuesday, 16 March 2021

On Forwardness

 So much has happened since I last posted. It has been a trip. First, I FINISHED MY DEGREE and a very short time later I got a new job. It isn't related to writing (systems engineer), but it pays the bills. Happiness is: not worrying about where the next gas top-up comes from.

Then, I started playing in a new RPG campaign. That's coming up on two years running once a week and has been fun. As a writer, I've always seen the value in being part of these shared story experiences, but I also see how difficult it can be to fit in your own character's "narrative" at all, let alone at an appropriate moment.

After that, some people in China started getting sick and the world was thrown upside down. I can't believe that's an ongoing thing, yet here we are with a year under our belts and the world is still as it was. I've been working from home since, delineating between "work" and rest under my own schedules (sort of).

Writing has been so far from my mind as I've adjusted to much of that, but I've started entering competitions to push myself a little. Some of them are on websites where other entrants can read and give feedback, which is always a good thing. It helps having people give you a touchstone as to how you're doing.

My most ambitious project was entering a competition for a substantial prize. I didn't expect to win, but I'd hoped to get some really strong feedback from others: Not a peep. I always panic when that happens.

In relation to my RPG stuff, I do create little rules supplements for my favourite games and share them online. I don't expect people to pay (although that option is there), but it's nice when someone does. Sadly, that is a rare treat, but even more rare is for people to leave reviews. I know there's the old addage, "if you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all," but that isn't useful for helping others build on their craft. 

So, where possible, I will leave constructive criticism. Mostly, I try to point out places where a story can get confusing. Not every reader is going to be a sophisticated reader, and you have to write for that. I'm just as guilty of this as others.

And that's where I am. I'm coming back to writing, slowly but surely, and I'll be pen wrangling a lot more as I do.

Sunday, 3 March 2019

Word Abuse

I'm going through a couple of writing courses at the moment, which I sometimes use as a means of inspiration. Some of the more structured courses come with little writing exercises. These are usually enough to whet the appetite, or put a particular skill to the test.
One such exercise was the application of words in unusual contexts. The premise is that an ordinary word used in an inappropriate setting can create a new mood or form for the writing.
Some of the responses to this exercise are excellent (no I won't be sharing them here), but there are others where I feel that someone is abusing the language.
As I'm not trying to embarrass anyone, I won't be giving examples, but it got me thinking about something. Is there anything you've written in the past that you look back on and shudder? Have you ever written a poem, song, story that you now feel is so weak or embarrassing you wish it had never existed?

As for the exercise, my own example is this:

Uninvited, I was overtaken by a vibrant anxiety, filling my head with noise and heat.